Thursday's "Class" Assignment

Here is what you do with the essay I just emailed to you. This assignment is worth triple the points, so try your best!
In case you need to know, I wrote this essay using the Batman outline that I mailed to you earlier (also seen in the entry below). I have written an analysis of The Dark Knight, using essay Prompt#1. I am analyzing the Two main characters.
Know that my outline is structurally correct, and that it outlines the type of paper that would effectively answer the prompt, but this paper does not. This paper is not what I want, so do not follow this essay's example.
My essay has many errors, some that I want you guys to practice spotting.
Here is what you must look for AND mark:
+Find four uses of the second person (Not including things that are in quotes). Highlight these words in Blue.
+Find four formatting issues. Next to these issues write what the problem is and highlight your words in Red.
+Find three contractions or places that need apostrophes and correct them. Highlight these corrections in Orange.
+Find two run-on sentences and try your best to correct them. Highlight your corrections in Green.
+Find five misused commas or places that need commas and fix them. Highlight these corrections in Yellow.
+Find three different instances of redundancy and highlight them purple or magenta.
+Find four instances of an informal tone being used and simply make it bold.
+Find one major instance of failing to answer the prompt or deviating from the prompt and italicize it.
+Then, below my essay I want you to peer review the paper like we did for our partners last time. As my partner, what would you recommend I do to fix this paper. You cannot simply say that I am terrible and that I need to rewrite it. Do not be overly rude or unhelpful. What constructive criticism would you offer? Where should I focus on developing my ideas? Pick a few places you have questions about and ask them. Be specific.
+Finally, considering the following criteria I use to grade papers, what would you give me for a grade? Be fair.
Clarity = 20
Flow = 20
Details = 20
Analysis = 20
Form = 20

Remember this must be emailed back to me with your marks before 11:59 tonight (10-22)!

If you have a questions send me an email.
If you want to point to multiple things in a single sentence, instead of highlighting everything, highlight particular parts for the first thing and change the color of the font to the second color for the second thing.